Hi, its me Pranav again. In school, lately, my teachers are teaching me how to write poems. I can write Acrostic poems, Haikus and Shape poems. I wrote this Christmas haiku and wanted to share it with you all!
Reindeers in the sky
Sleigh bells are ringing very loud
Can you see Santa?
🎄🎅🎁🍪🥛
3 comments:
Well done Pranav :)
The next time you should try to introduce a 'twist' in the last line of the poem that upends the reader's mental picture from the first two lines. The idea is to bring a fresh perspective to nature and the home truths of life. I believe that is part of the charm of Haikus. For example you have the famous haiku by Basho:
"From time to time,
The clouds give rest
To the moon-beholders"
Here the poet is cleverly conveying that it is monsoon time and the clouds & the moon together make a beautiful sight. Instead of saying that directly, he says that folks continuously admiring the moon's beauty are getting a rest due to the clouds. Makes it more interesting, isn't it?
Thank you pedananna for your advise. I will try and do it next time.
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